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    dots Submission Name: Chains of Aciddots
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    Author: Acid
    ASL Info:    17/M/Newport, WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 103/159/76
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 730
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I'm not sure about this, but I think that you're supposed to read it fast.


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    dotsChains of Aciddots
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    Feathers drifting,
    Downy plumes of,
    Peices in the,
    Mirrored broken light-

    Scatters on the,
    Winds of change are,
    Hear the banshee's,
    Howling at the lily moon-

    On the rise above,
    The shores of,
    Pluto hangs upon,
    The tattered veil of night-

    Sewn by the,
    Fate is such a cruel,
    Mistress of the,
    Dead and dieing-

    On the field of,
    Battles won and,
    Lost to mist and,
    Memories are gone-

    Off to better,
    Places in the pitch,
    Blacker than the,
    Mind of this doomed poet.




    Submitted on 2007-04-16 14:30:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      coool your right it does have to be read fast. kinda like a beat poet sorta thing. nice i love the frozen imagry
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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