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    dots Submission Name: My Heartdots
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    Author: Maskannai
    ASL Info:    28/Female/Utah
    Elite Ratio:    4.94 - 214/184/78
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I'm not gonna get in to who it is for because it is way too personal.. I love him though..


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    dotsMy Heartdots
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    My heart cries for you,
    but your voice is lost
    somewhere in the distant shadows,
    My heart longs for you,
    but your touch is lost
    somewhere over a distant mountain
    of trouble and pain,
    My heart breaks because of you
    and the actions that
    couldn't have been avoided,
    My heart is incomplete without you
    and the love that we shared
    for so short a time,
    My heart is lonely without
    the soft voice of yours,
    telling me that we were blessed
    by the goddess for each other long ago,
    My heart grows cold and alone by itself
    as I remember
    what I want to forget
    and cannot for the fear
    that I will forget
    the most perfect love I ever had.




    Submitted on 2007-04-16 22:50:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Omg.....totally stealing my thoughts. Exactly the same things I am feeling right now. Well, I guess that's life for ya. Since I can relate so much to this poem, I do not even know what else to add. I totally felt it, the heartache, and the feeling of wanting to keep the moment forever, but not having it in your hands anymore. Thanx for sharing,
    ~Alina
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by Ms. DejFruit | [ Reply to This ]


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