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    dots Submission Name: We Kisseddots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 590/805/389
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWe Kisseddots
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    You tried to deny kissing me
    when we were young behind the tree
    the one behind your mothers house
    the one I first got arroused
    You kissed me
    I kissed you
    you touched me
    I touched you there
    you loved it
    I loved it
    we loved it
    within fear

    Years later you don't remember
    that afternoon in September
    after school we met up
    and did what she shouldn't of
    You liked it
    I liked it
    we loved it
    lets go back there
    you hugged me
    I hugged you
    we hugged
    like we cared




    Submitted on 2007-04-17 00:53:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      LMAO Papadox it's a POEM nothing real get over yourself!
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn man you are like 30 years old. Just get over it. No activity lately? Anyway it would have been ok if you were like 22 years old but like this it seems a bit lame.
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW, like, there is alot not really said that can be filled in by the reader i think, like you never say what really happened that much like you leave enough room for me to make the poem fit my own life. i really liked it!
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]


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