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    dots Submission Name: Strawberry Daydots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsStrawberry Daydots
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    It was a phrase I heard
    from a customer one day
    I asked how she were
    it is a strawberry day
    laughing as if it was a joke
    but to her it means dandy
    not another word was spoke
    and she grabbed her bags and left me
    every now and then I think of that day
    and when she came in
    that strawberry day
    with that strawberry grin




    Submitted on 2007-04-17 00:54:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ah...pure optimism. "strawberry days"...very nice. (i think you spelled strawberry wrong in the title...) The world needs more optimistic people. unfortunately, there is an optimism famine. oh, well.

    off to take my happy pills.
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by Alyra | [ Reply to This ]


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