Three Roses by Blue Monk

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Author:	Blue Monk
Elite Ratio:	7.91 - 552/243/73
Words:	118

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	294
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	674

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Reposted by (almost) request. Also a personal fav.

Three Roses dots

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Three roses left a monument
within a vase to compliment
the beauty that now lies within,
the mother you have always been.

I carry in my memory
the sweetest part of history,
your eyes, your hugs and your brown hair,
the times you showed how much you care.

I know you're watching from above
for roses you did always love,
one left for each that you did birth
before you parted from this earth.

Pray know your magic stays with me
for I have also brought forth three,
one image of you given birth,
a monument that walks the earth

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  It is very original and beautifully poignant that you chose 3 roses for the 3 children your mom had. You have a wonderful talent for rhyme, something I just can't do. The whole piece is full of sweetness and love, but the 1st and last verses are my favorite. I know this was written in April 2007, but I would still like to tell you I'm sorry for your loss. Feelings of loss are timeless, and I believe this to be your biggest comfort:

"I know you're watching from above
for roses you did always love,
one left for each that you did birth
before you parted from this earth."

Lisa
| Posted on 2008-06-15 00:00:00 | by Seagirl | [ Reply to This ]
  nice poem...
| Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by Kornfreakinabox | [ Reply to This ]
  I really wish I could write a poem that is as strong as this one. So happy with yourself, not suffering, because I know my mother wouldn't want me to suffer. This poem gave me a bit hope tonight as well.

The ending was very sweet. I hope above is where every loved one watches us. I'm adding to my favorites. Keep in touch friend.
| Posted on 2008-01-31 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
  This is the one i wanted to fav...it's a beautiful piece that speaks from your heart....I love reading poetry written for a parent....I know your Mom has passed to the otherside and that is sad....
I believe when people we love pass to the otherside although we can't see them or hear their voice they are with us in spirit....Your Mom must have been a wonderful woman for you to write a heartfelt poem like this.....I'm a Mom and I enjoyed the feeling of reading it.....great piece bluemonk ......
| Posted on 2007-08-12 00:00:00 | by deluka | [ Reply to This ]
  All my life i have never had that kind of relationship with my mother who put me through 7 years of abuse. Reading your poem makes me really wish that things would have turned out different in the long run. I wish i had that mother to even mourn for. Very nice write.

~MaGgIe
| Posted on 2007-06-24 00:00:00 | by Magger32 | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the tribute to your mother. Its sweet. Well written. I wouldnt change a thing about it. And it shows how much you care. I would give anything to have that relationship with my mother...and it makes me appreciate that she is still alive and I can try to acheive that relationship. Thanks for the insight.

-Randee
| Posted on 2007-05-12 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]
  Very Nicely written
I take this write as an Ode to The Love A Mother gives her child
This is a perfect write to post for Mothers Day and I Thank You for reposting it
My Mother is and always will be my Best Friend in the World
I would be nothing without her Love
God Bless
Ron

If you get a chance Blue Monk can you Please let me know what you think of some of my newer writes
I believe the last 4 writes on my page were written by my Mother
Perhaps you would like to check out her writings
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  A beautiful tribute to ones mother! How sweet are the memories one has of a caring, loving mother. You have expressed those endearing memories so well. Thoughts of a lifetime has been written in this poem of memories never to be suppressed but with tender emotions Remembered Forever.

Nicely written!
Best Regards,

| Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
  Sheesh! That's so sad! But an excellent write. Thanks for the tears :)

It really is an excellent poem, so well-written and the wording is perfect. It's always so hard to lose someone, especially a mother, and it's even harder to put that pain into words. But you've done it here, in a beautiful, yet not overpowering or melodramatic, way. Simply lovely.

Cheers and God bless,

~Mandi~
| Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by Mandi Gayle | [ Reply to This ]
  Yeah, I'm commenting on it again:).

Reading this poem invokes a jumble of emotions. Pleasure at being gently prompted to take a moment to really appreciate the bond and love between me and my mum, and sadness that the writer has lost the gift of his own mother's physical presence.

Thank you for reposting it. I'm going to save it for when you decide to take it away again.
| Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by cabbalistic | [ Reply to This ]

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