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    dots Submission Name: my angeldots
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    Author: red passion
    ASL Info:    15/m/Lost in my mind(KY)
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 117/291/81
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsmy angeldots
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    When you're tears fall from you're cheeks;
    They heavily chime.
    From chin length down to the ground;
    Exactly on time.

    That blackest heart,
    which lay within your chest
    is gone and forgotten.
    I've done my best.

    To protect you from pain.
    I'm so silent and caring.
    Why can't you give me you're love;
    The one that you keep on sharing?

    And are you so sure.
    That in the life which you dawn in?
    You can be one of them;
    Those angels who've fallen.

    Because I care;
    You still can't see.
    You just continue to say
    that you never really deserved me.

    But my broken heart;
    You're hands still bound.
    If you're and angel,
    where are you now?




    Submitted on 2007-04-17 10:38:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written well till the end, it didn't make much sense to me. other than that it flowed well, rhymed pretty good, and the emotion was portrayed nicely and deep. I must say, your poems of love and loss touch me most because I can relate best to them, feeling the love and dreading the loss. I do so much hope she realizes what she has and quits pulling away. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

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    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]


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