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    dots Submission Name: I wish you could help.dots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI wish you could help.dots
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    You are so far away.
    How we stay together even shocks me.

    I care for you with an undieing passion.
    But I don't know if we can be.

    I'm scared of this new world that you have shown to me.
    I blush when you are spoken of, I can never find my voice.

    You are much stronger then me.
    But when you want to protect me I find myself pulling away.

    The way you speak of your love for me makes me giggle.
    Those stupid girly habbits its amazing only you can revile them.

    I don't know what to do.
    I'm scared and I'm confused.

    You fill me with overwhemling happiness.
    Yet others say its bad.

    Is it really bad?
    These feelings I have for you.




    Submitted on 2007-04-17 10:44:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      .......... now i'm sad..... but it was good!
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by yamifox | [ Reply to This ]


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