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    dots Submission Name: Luminadots
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    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    33/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 1055/434/90
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1000
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 515



    Description:
       Just a vision


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    dotsLuminadots
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    I am blinded by four suns
    I canít tell you much
    Shape is multiplied beyond recognition
    Shadow non-existent
    I am blinded by four suns
    Reflected by a trillion salt crystals
    All colors die here
    Motion died here
    I am blinded by four suns
    This landscape is dead
    This is death planet
    This desert is lightís graveyard
    I am blinded by four suns
    Iím afraid I canít tell you much
    About the giant figures in the distance




    Submitted on 2007-04-17 12:55:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i agree with the majority of the comments here. i was completely different than most things that you read on here. i was simple yet exotic and complicated. i was in awe by the end of the poem. it is very different and i like different ;-)

    Dont stop writing you truely have a gift

    ~Ms.Understood
    | Posted on 2011-12-30 00:00:00 | by MsUnderstood | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing how easy it is to let yourself be pulled into this poem, and imagine it.
    It's simple yet different.
    Never stop writing :)
    | Posted on 2009-02-09 00:00:00 | by WeirdNormality | [ Reply to This ]
      Psychosis, abstraction, punchline repetition... a very strong and intensive work indeed. I admit I was enthralled. As far as expressionism goes I can say you're doing a very good job with your writers pen. It got me on fertile ground and I followed it where it went.

    P
    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      why does this remind me of salvador dali? that's a compliment, btw. i love his work. this is terrific.

    peace, love and all that other junk,

    joe
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      This blew my mind. Exotic, yet simple. One of a kind and I love it. the repition through out the piece made the effects of the contrast beween intensity and simpleness blow up! Wonderful!!!
    | Posted on 2007-04-17 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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