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    dots Submission Name: im giving updots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 961
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 667



    Description:
       wrote it in class.
    at the moment my mentallity was weak.
    i was going to burn it at lunch but then i read it and said "hey, this isnt bad".
    enjoy


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    dotsim giving updots
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    im begining to break
    my strength
    has become my weakness
    there is no hope left
    ive lost everything
    and only within a few words
    nothing matters anymore
    ive given up

    these memories
    continue to hurt my mind
    and force me to conteplate
    "am i not destined to be happy?"
    if this is the case
    then give me a sign
    so that i may accept it
    because ive given up

    if i accept it
    i will let this pain continue
    and not fight it
    i will linger on
    with this torture
    i will....
    ...simply....
    give up...




    Submitted on 2007-04-17 13:42:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my only piece of advice: don't give up!!!
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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