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    dots Submission Name: Tiffanydots

    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 539
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       goes to a girl i know....a girl i like....a girl i think ive fallen in love with.

    edited, for when i show her.
    wish me luck

    but im not sure if i should show her this.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    why do i continue to go on like this?
    why do i look at you this way?
    why is it my heart yearns for you?
    why cant i tell you how i feel?

    maybe "in time" i will
    ...but how?
    if only you knew
    the way i am.

    im not the kind of man that would:

    use you for sex...
    a body so precious
    i could never want to lose
    so why abuse it?

    cheat on you...
    somebody so beautiful,
    i see no flaw
    you are perfect in my eyes.
    why would i want another?

    never would i hurt you
    i have no reason
    why i would or even want to

    if only you knew
    that i think im in love with you

    so the question is
    how about you and me get together?

    Submitted on 2007-04-17 13:57:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      not sure if you were avoiding ryming but over all im liking the thoughts i have felt like that and i just flew with it, the girl became my best freind and we were cool she went through 3 boy freinds all in which i helped her with, i told her evently(after boy number 2) she did very mcuh so like me and it wasnt a good time, because i was so amazing she only wanted me in the perfect situation well now we are dating now and things are perfect theres alot more to the story but she is amazing and i love her and if you love her just wait for the right time to tell her when ever you fel that that may be, i hope im coming through clear somthimes im a little blury
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]

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