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    dots Submission Name: Mrs. Pacmandots

    Author: Rue
    ASL Info:    16/F/the dark side
    Elite Ratio:    4.54 - 244/182/44
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       get it, she'd be easy to drown. No arms or legs.

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    dotsMrs. Pacmandots

    I drowned Mrs. Pac man
    She didnít stand a chance

    I killed ten thousand POWs
    Their government doesnít care

    I put flowers by the electric chair
    Then I killed a dove

    I sweetened its blood with gasoline
    And I sold it as cheap love wine

    I found the lost bottles in which it would sell best
    Pixies long suffocated curled in their sticky tangerine tears

    I used the winery fortune to open a news stand
    The first headline read

    Old Man Lived in Manger:
    Body Found Among Ashes

    I see brilliantly irritating pink
    Bleeding through clouds
    And the orange skin of the sky

    Submitted on 2007-04-17 15:13:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I read this piece intently waiting for some semblance of a story to evolve but alas it never did. You have some pretty trippy statements in there but as a whole it pretty much left me wanting.
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]

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