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    dots Submission Name: The Glassy Shoresdots

    Author: The Conqueror
    ASL Info:    21/female/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.48 - 178/204/42
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Glassy Shoresdots

    What vast array of darkness fills
    What shining beams of sunlight kills
    The creeping black thats essence spills
    Onto the glassy shores of love

    What choppy waters' sails will find
    What prism clear that rainbows wind
    The angry slap of waves declines
    Onto the glassy shores of love

    What desperate cry of anguish seethe
    What burning passions to deceive
    The scarred and branded soul relieve
    Onto the glassy shores of love

    Submitted on 2007-04-17 15:28:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this type of structure and form......I use it myself quite often. The wording compliments the repitition and I really like how you linked everything together to enable the whole thing to flow i waves, wind, water, rainbow etc.....all lend to the outdoors and of course leads the reader to the glassy shores of love.

    This poem, is structured, formed and worded superbly well.

    Highly effective and a joy to read.

    | Posted on 2008-04-07 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is mysterious, but is attractive in it's mystery, as love is a vast eternity, with many, many stories! "Love conquers all" they say, and "Love is All", I say! This is excellent, and is mysterious and intriguing! You have a talent for poetry and writing that is rare, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I might be delusional but I hope there is passion in love for those who believe in it.
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by The Wise Fool | [ Reply to This ]
      This was quite beautiful to say the least. Its nice to know there is still passion in love.

    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]

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