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    dots Submission Name: untitled songdots
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    Author: boo boo
    ASL Info:    18/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 108/104/60
    Words: 308
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 512
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1854



    Description:
       it is in desperate need of a title so if you have any suggestions after reading let me know :0


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    When the sun rises and kisses the dew
    I will awake and know that I am next to you.
    When the sun says good bye for the day
    I will be the one askin' you to stay.
    Baby you know in your heart it's true
    that the only man I will ever want is you.
    When the moon rises in the night sky
    It's beside you in the damp grass I will lie.
    When the stars twinkle their beauty throughout
    I want you to know you're the one I'm thinking 'bout.
    Baby it's as obvious as the look in your eyes
    that you know I'll kiss away the tears you cry.
    When the heavens are crying tears of salty rain
    I will be the woman taking away your pain.
    When the winds caress the grasses of the meadows
    I will vow to you my promise to never ever turn an' go.
    Baby, your the one who's drivin' me insane
    with the thoughts you're sendin' to my brain.
    When the years first snow falls silently to the ground
    I will be there telling you to look 'round and 'round.
    When lighting is tracing it's warning out into the night
    I'll be beside you helpin' you win the fight.
    Baby, I'll be thankin' god that you're the one I found,
    the one who put me back on solid ground.
    When the sun is hidin' behind the cover of a cloudy sky
    I'll whisper in your ear that you'll be my forever guy.
    When the sleet threatens to beat a hole in the roof over our heads
    I'll be your shelter, I'll be your warmth as we lay together dreaming in bed.
    Baby, thank you for making all the things in my dreams come true,
    for not trying to be anyone else but who you really are and that's you!




    Submitted on 2007-04-17 19:12:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well lets see...i very much liked this song, do you have music you wrote it to? and as for the name..hmmmmmmmmm..."just you" i liekth at you are talking about some boy and he is like amazing and he is all you want so how about just you because i would do any thing for "just you" i dont know its somthing i say alot and i just thought it fit i dont know mabey you will liek my idea mabey not but i hope that you will at least tell me what you think since i told you what i think, happy days love ben
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]


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