time slowly passes
and memories begin to fade
as you hear the thunder
and the rain against your window
you try to think of all that used to be
you try to think of me
but sometimes it gets so hard
because your memories of me
have already begun to fade
you hear the tap tap tapping of the rain
and you try to remember the years past
you try to remember the "good ol' times"
but your memories of me are fading
ever so slightly
but fading nonetheless
as the raging thunder overpowers
your distant thoughts of me
This, in some weird way, this reminds me of a poem I have titled "Fallen Down." You are more than welcome to read it if you'd like. Memories of friends have lasted with me for a long time. Sometimes it take a little reminder here and there to get the details right though. This is sweet and hope long distances do not impact your strong bond so much. As to the work: perhaps destanza the first 2 lines away form the rest of the work and it would read just a bit better. Overall: Excellent wrtie. I like your smooth, down to earth methodology here and look forward to reading more of what you have to say. Cheers!
Submission Name: Memories
