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Author: tennisfuzz
ASL Info:    21/F/wandering.
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for good or bad, I've had a busy 16th year...
its not a poem, just a creative list
punctuation (or lack of) and capitalization is on purpose

Thanks Guys

When i was 14
a boy gave me a glass rose.
it said: "i will Love you always"

When i was 15
a boy gave me my first kiss.
it was sweet... a goodnight kiss

When I Was 16

a boy gave me a bracelet.
it was in a foreign country

a boy tried to give me his... tongue
i didn't want it!

a boy sang me a song.
he sang like Ray Charles

a boy called me an Angel.
i cure his loneliness with words alone

a boy gave me a Love poem...
i still CRY when i read it

a Boy gave me great conversations.
we're having lunch Sunday

And one boy gave me all his LOVE
for some reason, he's still giving it

Submitted on 2007-04-17 22:30:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Awesome. I really like the looking into the past and examining relationships and how they affect the main character. You said that the capitalization and punctuation were on purpose, so why are some things capitalized and in all-caps? I really like how honest your work is, and how well one can understand what you are talking about. I know you weren't really trying to write poetry, but more of thoughts, but it has the same impact on the reader as good poetry, as you really tell a short story history of your relationships. Great idea and well done.

| Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by Mykquillion | [ Reply to This ]
  Gratefully given, I'm sure.

Glad, very glad you have a person who does.

Trying to find mine, searching around.

We'll see where it goes.
| Posted on 2007-07-24 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
  ! why that is interesting! I really enjoyed reading this because I have just made the transition from 16 to 17 and looking back, in general, I feel that I have had no 'crushes' pursue me or what not, but when i look back at journals, I know I'm wrong and yes, 13... this happened... 14...that happened...15...16...etc. I enjoyed this, I did! Because I can relate. Neat.

Peace, LucyDiamond
| Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
  not bad but why am i last?
| Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]

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