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    dots Submission Name: Dear Daddots

    Author: Kube
    ASL Info:    24/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 64/56/32
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsDear Daddots

    Such a long time
    In my head it's still yesterday
    So much fun
    Yes fun; what a blessing
    I have change now
    A bit for the worse; a bit for the good
    More good i hope
    I pray alot more
    Does that help?

    I know what i want to be
    It's a sad ending though
    But im brave; the way you taught me
    I know it will be sad
    I wish you were here
    Here to talk to me
    Talk some sence into me
    Haha it makes me laugh

    I want to have a glass of rum with you
    Talk about my day
    Talk about normal stuff
    Talk about what fathers and sons sould talk about;
    Just talk

    I see you in my sleep
    I wake
    I get sad that your not there when i wake
    I miss you dad
    I want to talk to you again
    Come back

    I can accept
    I am a man
    I can handle it
    Remember me saying that?
    But i can; and i have
    God i miss you
    Come back

    Your grandson is cool
    I like being a uncle
    He makes me laugh
    I want to be a father one day
    I will call him Brian
    I miss you dad
    See you soon.

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       The way you write sounds like bitter humor(or happiness?). Its a depressing poem. But I like it. I like that towards the end you show that your still standing tall with your head held high. Even though sometimes you think you might fall. My mom and dad are seperated so I can't relate. but I like it alot. Good work.
    | Posted on 2007-06-28 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]
    | Posted on 2007-04-19 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]

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