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    dots Submission Name: It's not me, It's you!dots

    Author: MornSweetSong
    ASL Info:    21/female/wales
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 110/83/46
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsIt's not me, It's you!dots

    You're really disgusting you know.

    Your top teeth pout over your lip sometimes.
    You don't realise, but you snort like a pig, really loud.
    Your clothes are always scruffy and stained.

    Sex was dreadful. Yes, I did fake it once or twice.
    Every other time I just admitted, you weren't upto the job.

    Do you realise how sick you've made me?
    Not just of you, but of myself.

    There isn't enough bleach in the world...
    to remove your touch from my skin.

    Your constant texts and phone calls,
    always wanting and needing to know where, who with and why.
    Always crying when I just wanted to be alone.
    Always getting angry when I went out with friends.

    You even became jealous of my own brother,
    fucking nutcase.

    Your family are perfect, I love them loads.
    I swear you must be adopted.

    You didn't wash enough - the stench of your cheap cologne lingers.
    Only in my memory.

    You were so damned scruffy!
    Those hideous vests, those dreadful elasticated trousers...

    Oh the shame...

    The stubble on your face! Jeez, like wiping myself with sandpaper.
    You know what I mean.

    I'll hate you forever, for making me feel so ashamed of myself.
    When I've done nothing wrong.
    I only ever cared about your happiness.
    I asked for nothing, but sacrificed EVERYTHING.

    Now I've left you...it took a long time for me to realise.
    It's not me I should hate - but it's you I should despise.

    Submitted on 2007-04-18 16:10:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. It flowed well and was worded fantastically and the emotion was portrayed perfectly. I felt the anger and squirmed with the embrassement. It was great. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow... this seems very personal, so I won't really touch it, except to say that I loved the last line and it had a lot of punch. *nod* Good luck! ~Cora
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]

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