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    dots Submission Name: Mountains (revised)dots
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    Author: shannanigan
    ASL Info:    18 female
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 47/59/13
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 367
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 370



    Description:
       Some of yall who commented on my origina "Mountains" wanted me to do more with it, so here it is.


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    dotsMountains (revised)dots
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    Majestic wonders that cover the earth,
    Overshadowing everything around,
    United to one another with
    Natural bonds never to be broken.
    Tempting they are to climb,
    A path to find peaceful solitude.
    Invisible forces draw me near to these
    Never ending joys, they captivate me.
    Serene realms they are, and ever shall be.




    Submitted on 2004-06-12 13:43:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really nice. I love visiting the mountains (the Appalachians since I live in South Carolina) especially in the autumn.
    | Posted on 2004-06-12 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is what I was looking for in the original piece...you've kept your imagery but made it a cohesive work instead of short descriptive lines...Very nice rewrite.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-06-12 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh interesting. The ending line was very good,a s was the wole piece. Original and written well! That's what I love to see in a poem!
    | Posted on 2004-06-12 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]



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