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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots
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    Author: blue_pixie_dust
    ASL Info:    16 female
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 42/36/22
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 171
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1608



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       I don't really know. I jsut started typing down things. I'm not quite sure what to say about it.


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    Forbidden doors lay below
    This cold forgotten land,
    And I wander through the forest floors
    watching the old, sinking sand.

    As I gaze into the open sky
    And into the past beyond
    I sence the feeling of terror and wonder
    The wonder that lays in the open.

    I walk in through the doors
    And past the silver candlesticks.
    What shall await me past
    These wide eyed, red and dark bricks?

    The cold chill through those open doors
    Sends a shiver up my spine,
    And a long, menacing light
    Guides me to the power inside.

    The power has overtaken most
    And not only people of money in need
    And not only powerful kings and queens,
    But people built up with pride and greed

    I look through a crack
    Where the light seems to come
    And standing there a power posseses me
    A shiver running through, makes me feel numb

    But as I look deep into my heart
    I sence the power is nothing but greed
    and nothing that anything can save
    no one can save the one in need

    A treasure was hidden
    that's what it was
    a treasure of greed and lust
    and sinful power it was

    But there is One that can get rid
    Of all of this greed and lust
    and all of those
    people in need

    The treasure is sin
    and through sin it was given
    but by God it was taken
    and through God I am living








    Submitted on 2007-04-19 21:14:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      really nice rhymes... you weaved a wonderful story in this...
    zd
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by zen-dog | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. it has one of those sparks.
    | Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by draconus | [ Reply to This ]



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