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........... I feel bad for not being forgiving.....
Kids fall from trees.
They break bones.
Get into fights.
A few extras will go unnoticed.
A mild concussion here and there.
It won’t affect them in the long run.
He would cry and cry.
He couldn’t handle it.
I begged you to leave him be.
So you started hitting me.
It wasn’t the same.
You never aimed to prove authority to him.
You did with me.
You wanted to be the boss.
To see how long it would take to break me.
You would swear if I told you’d kill me.
I believed you.
I didn’t want you going over the edge.
I did it all for him.
Endured it all without his knowledge.
He sits in the house playing on his games.
I couldn’t let you hurt him.
I’ve always been stronger.
You knew this.
I still don’t see how that made me a threat.
For god sakes I was four.
That didn’t change anything.
As I grew older you learned more tricks.
Gained some twisted friends.
My innocence was the lest if your worries.
You would take me to poker night.
Lose most the savings.
Then you’d use me to get it back.
For twenty dollars they would take me.
I’d sit in a room cold and scared.
They would do what they wished and send me out.
I would cry.
You would scream.
Then you’d would hit me.
You’d accuse me of not caring.
Your stupid lies didn’t bother me.
I cared or else I wouldn’t have gone.
I wanted to take care of him.
You knew that.
When I would step out of line you would throw him in the mix.
I would do as you say.
I didn’t want him hurt.
He couldn’t handle the pain.
So many years later.
He doesn’t have a clue.
He really truly loved you.
He cried when you died.
Locked himself in his room.
How dare you hurt him you selfish bastard.
I will never forgive you.
Submitted on 2007-04-20 08:52:22
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I like this one. It's hard to forgive people. Good write.
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