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    dots Submission Name: high tidedots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
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       and its so true

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    dotshigh tidedots

    these are the words that im screaming into your ear
    and making you fear
    forcing you to hear
    whats clear
    making you look in the mirror
    look at yourself and see
    what used to be
    is no more
    because you locked the door
    and threw away the key
    didnt even make a copy for me
    now even i cant set you free
    or hold you close to me
    and i dont know why
    you have to lie
    and hide
    or sit beside the high tide
    because i fear for you
    hoping the waters dont get to you
    but at the same time wishing they do
    thinking they might wash away the pain in you
    and make you true
    so you will be you
    so you can know that i am your friend
    and it will never end
    and i will never send
    you away
    or make you pay
    for your mistakes
    and i wont leave the pages blank
    and i'll always thank
    you for the times you wipe away my tears and make my world clear
    but its my turn
    to return
    and heal the burn
    that you didnt earn
    so i cleanse you
    with the tide you fell into
    making you
    once again true
    and even after your gone i wont forget you

    Submitted on 2007-04-20 13:06:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This, too, had a very rap'y feeling to it and whatever and however "IT" comes out - prose, verse, rhyme - you still are expressing and that is the important part!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooh, it's very...*spoken word.* I have to say I didn't care for it much, but spoken word kind of stuff isn't my thing. Seemed to be full of desperation to rhyme, rhyme isn't important, it should be more what you're trying to say, I think. Anyway, good subject. Good imagery, there, too.
    | Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by Abby Sinthetic | [ Reply to This ]

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