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    dots Submission Name: Infantiledots
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    Author: necromance
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 43/40/19
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       uhh... i'm not entirely sure


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    dotsInfantiledots
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    Watched the rain hit the ground,
    From the window....
    Shapes under the sheets,
    In the attic and
    (I like to play with dolls)
    He whispered...
    Our corner,
    Stroking my hair,
    Silk (before it rots)...
    Fingers are ice,
    Handled me delicately,
    In the dark...
    and Tears built up
    In the corners.
    Watching myself drown
    In black eyes...
    That roll in their sockets
    When i throw my toys,
    And rip my dress.
    Stain my lips,
    Hide me under your ripped sheets,
    Down the hall...
    Breathing too fast
    (To live),
    You know you see me,
    Through your screen,
    Claw at your neck and
    Scratch the wall,
    Because [i don't dare] forget my demons.
    Hold me down,
    (you're the worst of them all)...





    Submitted on 2007-04-20 14:05:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hehe how are you not entirely sure, sue?
    you have lived with yourself for long enough to understand that your mind doesn't always make complete sense, and that for some reason things are not always strung together in what most would call "coherent thought"

    however, luckily we have similar thought processes, so i am entirely, entirely sure that this is a quite lovely poem that truly reflects sue...
    especially the part about "i like to play with dolls"...one must not forget the dollies! i believe i shall add this pwettyful thing to my favorites list because i like it muchlyful!

    and cake tastes like purple, as we figured out recently

    ~chaos~
    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by whispered_chaos | [ Reply to This ]


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