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    dots Submission Name: Write Goodbye on my Gravedots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/155/74
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsWrite Goodbye on my Gravedots
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    Goodbye.
    It really is forever isn't it?
    Goodbyes
    Leave my heart in a painful fit.
    Goodbye
    Is all everyone says.
    Goodbye
    Leaves me wanting to be dead.
    Goodbye
    Without a reason why.
    Goodbye
    Leaving me to cry.
    Goodbye
    When I want to say hello.
    Goodbye
    It's all I'll ever know.
    Goodbye
    Don't say that please!
    Goodbye
    It's killing me....




    Submitted on 2007-04-20 14:56:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       It is good. I understand it but it seems as though you forced it from your heart. But I like the way it was layed out. And you could have used more discriptive words. But good one. Keep on writing.
    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]


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