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    dots Submission Name: legs loose with spitdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotslegs loose with spitdots

    all those watchful hours
    the chary stares
    eyes like dead air
    the crushing voids of love
    to watch you
    bleeding on the mirror
    aroused by water
    circused by the thorns
    to see you crouching
    poses turned to stone
    the billowing mouths revolving
    buttons on your chest
    eyelids like the snow
    stalking a darb fingertip round my neck
    your whispers like mercury
    lips dropping in temperature
    legs loose with spit
    eyes rolling away
    to see you falling
    pillowed by the sinister grass
    meek under the tree's cathedral
    heart like an icebox
    your feet postured like thunder
    bones rubbing away
    the cobra moon ignoring you
    wind like liquid on your breasts
    wrapped in some gravity not your own
    with bows in your hair
    to see you across from me
    invisible in your contumacious storms
    to see you hanging around by your arms
    like a great fury staged away
    lost in the ken of your dream
    and red in the tiny futures

    Submitted on 2007-04-20 21:50:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      really nice imagery... original yet precise. me like :)
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by zen-dog | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved the line about your heart being in an icebox it reads so true. gloriouse as always

    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, really really nice..you find the most unique ways to expound things..I call talent...I really enjoyed this! so much fantasy going on here, great imagery..Your work is so passionate..which is why I'm a big fan of yours..your words flow like water and art paints its beautiful picture..

    The first person to comment on this is sure not who I expected..ha

    ..Damn I wanna choke someone
    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh yeah, I feel special cuz I made your first comment on this poem...


    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a lot! So are you talking about the girl you told me about?
    Ahg, for some reason, this is embarassing but, I felt like you were talking to me and about me, because the poem is so good.


    Gosh but that makes me even more depressed...

    I like all the weird imagery you put in, really unusual...

    gatta go... -sniff-

    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]

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