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    dots Submission Name: The Tale Ends Heredots
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    Author: Cora Windover
    ASL Info:    1,292/it/Radiant Garden
    Elite Ratio:    4.16 - 862/761/201
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    Angel in Hell XII


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    dotsThe Tale Ends Heredots
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    The stars will fade eventually
    And I'l be there, watching
    On my lonesome in this ruin,
    In this prison of a place.

    The halls are empty,
    I expected that,
    But the silence drives me mad.
    The stone is cracked here,
    I know you've been here,
    The idea makes me sad.

    I thought his eyes would haunt me more,
    But you're the one I think of.
    Are you living?
    Are you happy?
    Fathers worry,
    And I won't ignore that fact.

    I thought I'd think of other things,
    I thought I'd reminisce.
    But the future captivates me,
    As sure as it eludes me.
    And your feet walked these paths
    You battled in these halls,
    And you are free.
    You brought love here,
    That much I can see.

    I am no angel,
    But you truly were heaven,
    And if that was heaven,
    Then this is surely hell.

    I chose this ending,
    And the choice is over,
    I still wonder
    What living would be like.

    I never was an angel,
    But with you, my life was heaven
    And if you're what made life heaven,
    Then I've fallen down to hell.

    If I had the chance?
    Perhaps I'd do the whole thing over,
    And I'd never
    Have the chance to live forever,
    But it's over.
    Yes, the tale ends right here.




    Submitted on 2007-04-20 21:57:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well. It flowed nicely, and the wording brought out the imagery fantastically. I didn't find a part I didn't like, therefore, I have to critical things to say. I can relate though, I have felt this way after losing someone close to me. I hope you do find a way to get the chance to start over and find a happily ever after. Keep up the nice work, and I'll keep reading

    Saint Raxor
    | Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]



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