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Why can't you be honest with me?


Author: black rose13
ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137 /97 /39
Words: 140
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Why can't you be honest with me?



Why do you insist on pulling me on a string?
It's like picking petals off a flower.
do you love me or do you not?
(easy question)

For my sake...
please just let me know.
I can't take this guesing and choosing game.
Is this your way of fun?

"I love you." "I need you." I miss you"
These words just keep digging into my skin.
And I fell hard when you said you only wanted to be with me.

For my sake...
please just let me know.
I can't take this guessing and choosing game.
Is this your way of fun?

And now that I know that everything you said was a lie.
I'm proud to say that you're the one that made my heart die.

For my sake...
tell me the truth.




Submitted on 2007-04-21 07:29:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  T-T I like it. Its sad. Good wright.
| Posted on 2007-07-25 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey...I like your poem...Specially this part:

It's like picking petals off a flower.
Do you love me or do you not?

And the sarcastic part: (easy question)
Good job ,keep it up !

*Drakoniss
| Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
  fantastic. that is wonderful... the poem...not the fact.

"These words just keep digging into my skin.
And I fell hard when you said you only wanted to be with me."

It's like picking petals off a flower.
do you love me or do you not?"


you've got it kiddo you've got the shine

RAchelle
| Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  i know just how you feel, don't liars and manipulators just get to you?
it was a very good work, you should keep it up and keep writing, i see nothing you need to change
-rachelle
| Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a good piece but it is very sad. Keep up the good work and I hope things workout for you. God bless!
| Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by Depression420 | [ Reply to This ]


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