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    dots Submission Name: Why can't you be honest with me?dots
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    Author: black rose13
    ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137/97/39
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWhy can't you be honest with me?dots
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    Why do you insist on pulling me on a string?
    It's like picking petals off a flower.
    do you love me or do you not?
    (easy question)

    For my sake...
    please just let me know.
    I can't take this guesing and choosing game.
    Is this your way of fun?

    "I love you." "I need you." I miss you"
    These words just keep digging into my skin.
    And I fell hard when you said you only wanted to be with me.

    For my sake...
    please just let me know.
    I can't take this guessing and choosing game.
    Is this your way of fun?

    And now that I know that everything you said was a lie.
    I'm proud to say that you're the one that made my heart die.

    For my sake...
    tell me the truth.




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      T-T I like it. Its sad. Good wright.
    | Posted on 2007-07-25 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey...I like your poem...Specially this part:

    It's like picking petals off a flower.
    Do you love me or do you not?

    And the sarcastic part: (easy question)
    Good job ,keep it up !

    *Drakoniss
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
      fantastic. that is wonderful... the poem...not the fact.

    "These words just keep digging into my skin.
    And I fell hard when you said you only wanted to be with me."

    It's like picking petals off a flower.
    do you love me or do you not?"


    you've got it kiddo you've got the shine

    RAchelle
    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      i know just how you feel, don't liars and manipulators just get to you?
    it was a very good work, you should keep it up and keep writing, i see nothing you need to change
    -rachelle
    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good piece but it is very sad. Keep up the good work and I hope things workout for you. God bless!
    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by Depression420 | [ Reply to This ]


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