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Revealing Letter


Author: caballero7137
ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9 /104 /123
Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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Revealing Letter




The local postman
brought me tears
in a sealed envelope,
one swift fall day
postmarked tombstone.
Swimming in the liquid
of freshly poured tears
were few short words
and a piece of rope
looped like a noose
that outlined clearly
the suicide
and the feeling
that I was bound
to feel fully.

With a grave lost
comes an overwhelm
of unimaginable pain.
Feelings of intense levels
jabbing the eyes
to cry a little more,
brusing the fleshy skin
colouring in dull blues
and putrid reds,
bludgeoning the heart
with old memories
that begin fade to sand,
and paralyse the soul
from any growth
crippling the power
to heal itself.
Simply binding it
and confining it
to a wooden cross
with vultures
and ravens
to feast upon,
for the rest
of time,
or before
the mind snaps.






Submitted on 2007-04-21 09:10:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you know when you are going through something and it is so intense that the only thing you notice around you are things that pertain that to certain event/experience/emotion/etc.
sometimes thats all you see.
i guess its just some kind of heightened awareness... i dont know.

anyways.
i read this... not expecting to read what i did but then i prolly should have. april 29th marks the third year anniversary of a death by hanging. only thing is... i never got a letter of explanation.
my boyfriend ended his own life that day. i was cut up for a very long time. somehow i have found a way to move on since. in someways i am a whole nother person.
i can go a whole year without breaking down all over the place but this last week has been ghastly... ive been falling apart all over the place and crying and everything. its been simply ghastly.

writing wise i think it could be better but im mostly only commenting to tell you that i understand where you are coming from and if this is a personal experience i send you all the strength in the world to make it through
| Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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