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If you believed, You were deceived.

Author: JAcksonJr
ASL Info:    20/Male/NY
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Words: 155
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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If you believed, You were deceived.

she said silver clouds
float high above
and never touch the ground
but i must object
for her reasoning was weak
even silver clouds turn black
and fall from their peaks

As in the spring
petals blossom with beauty
and on branches birds sing
But when the autumn air
gives it's kiss of death
all the birds depart
and no petals are left

So when you say
that silver clouds never fall
look at the seasons
they'll teach you all
and watch carefully
don't look the other away
because the clouds are gathering
and heading our way

Idiot! she said,
You are such a fool
she were stubborn in your ways,
stubborn as a mule
but then it began to rain
she turned to walk away
and gave me a look of disdain
while i had a good-hearted laugh

now i wonder..
do her feet tread rain on my behalf?

Submitted on 2007-04-21 14:09:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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