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    dots Submission Name: Do you remember?dots

    Author: blacktearz
    ASL Info:    15,female
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 59/69/16
    Words: 320
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsDo you remember?dots

    The warmth of the first summer sun brings you back,
    And for awhile I am captivated by your memory.
    A breeze blows against my face,
    And in it I hear all the songs we used to sing
    On summer nights when life seemed so easy.

    You know I still hear you laugh sometimes,
    Only to turn and find that your not there.
    It makes me wonder if somewhere, youre laughing,
    Remembering the same things I remember.
    Ill never forget them I Ill never forget you.

    I know things have changed, but Id still give the whole world
    To see you one last time, the way you used to be
    When Id hold you as you cried out to God.
    With the bittersweet tears of a repentant heart
    Streaming down your youthful face.
    You loved Him.

    Before the drugs life was so beautiful,
    It didnt take long though for them to take all the beauty away.
    They left me here with just an empty shell
    Of who you used to be.
    Alone, afraid, and powerless to change what youd, become.

    Were getting older now and I wonder if you still think of me
    I just wish there was some way you could know
    How much I care for you.
    From now until the day I die
    Ill be praying for God to bring my angel back to me.

    I pray that Ill see you there, at heavens gates,
    And we can look back on this time as a trial,
    One that we overcame.
    We can forget this life, and all its foolish heart-breaks,
    And I wont have to wonder anymore, if your laughing.

    We can sing all the songs we used to sing to Him,
    On summer nights.
    And In death, life will once again be easy.

    Submitted on 2007-04-21 17:48:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem is moveing and deep. It made me think alot about my past and who might be thinking some of the same thoughs about me. Poetry is a way to express your inner most feeling and this poem is one of the reasons that so many people like it. This poem has a few grammer problems that I noticed on the 2nd time though but they ar not very noticable the 1st time because I was so intranced by the words on the page. I love it and If your friendship was like this poem is they will remember you and all the good times that you had. great job and definatly keep writing.

    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by Lover girl | [ Reply to This ]
      It's hard to know how to comment when you don't specify.

    This was powerful, very powerful. Too powerful to have no title. I've been thinking on it and I'm not sure, but I never knew this person, either. Everything i can think of doesn't suit this poem... the only thing I can come up with is 'once more i cry'--but that sounds clich to this site where so many people write about lost loves...I don't know.

    There were a few places where you wrote "your" when it should have been you're (line 2 and line 31).

    It moved me, the way poetry should.

    Thanks for that,
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]

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