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    dots Submission Name: Sentenced by You #2dots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 331
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1134
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    dotsSentenced by You #2dots
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    Still here thinking about you,
    So where are you at?
    My love
    Here I am still thinking about you,
    And then you leave,
    My love

    I look but I can't find you,
    I'm just unable,
    To take you off my mind,
    For just a second,
    Feeling tied and confined,
    I'm going crazy,
    How can I stop,
    Thinking about you every second?.
    You mock me every night,
    In my dreams,
    Wake up and look beside me,
    But you are not there no,
    To sit there and just wonder,
    about the past,
    The long nights that we spent together comforting each other,
    This process is slowly driving me insane,
    like a snakes poison flowing freely through my veins,
    And here I sit like a dog,
    Patiently waiting for its owner,
    Feeling lonely because you are not here beside me.

    Tell me please,
    And honestly,
    If you don't want to be by my side,
    Here I am begging for forgiveness,
    Hoping that you won't walk out my life.
    Oh please tell me,
    Where are you at,
    Tell me please,
    Where are you at?
    Sitting here all alone,
    Just wanting to be at your side.

    Still here thinking about you,
    So where are you at?
    My love
    Here I am still thinking about you,
    And then you leave,
    My love

    Not even a phone call,
    while I'm here crying over you,
    Not knowing,
    If I'd be able to forget,
    What can I do for you to come back?
    I'm just hoping that you'd come back.

    Here I sit like a dog,
    Patiently waiting for its owner,
    Feeling lonely because you are not here beside me,
    And here I sit like a dog,
    Patiently waiting for its owner,
    Feeling lonely because you are not here beside me.

    Still here thinking about you,
    So where are you at?
    My love
    Here I am still thinking about you,
    And then you leave,
    My love





    Submitted on 2007-04-21 22:52:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When it comes to lyrics it's hard for me to judge because I can't hear the music. Your message is sincere and that is important. My only critique would be here:

    Here I am still thinking about you,
    And then you leave,
    My love

    I think "Ever since you left me, my love" is better since the song is about the pain you feel in endlessly waiting for this lovers return, "And then you leave" at the end like that just doesn't fit. Otherwise, good work_devoted
    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by devoted_dozer | [ Reply to This ]


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