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What is this I feel?


Author: darkwiccan14
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I'm super confused rite now, what am i to feel? all i feel is fury and sadness.


What is this I feel?



Anger and Pride,
Fill me as combined.
They swallow my whole
Inside.

How can this be stopped,
How can i tell it good-bye?

There's only danger,
And then there's Death.
Both I fear not,
But being swallowed whole
Is the shadowing of my heart.

How can I rid this shadow,
How can we part?

Questions haunt me,
When awake,
And when in in deep sleep.
I walk this empty hall,
And come close to a near door,
And have a little peep.
What do I see?
Well, why,
It's me.




Submitted on 2007-04-22 17:00:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It's very strong, good, deep, serious. It's excelent Word Choice, too.
| Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by VampireMaiden | [ Reply to This ]
  questions haunt me all the time too...

i like the way you come to a door which has you or your reflection on the other side... kinda spooky actually...

nice.
zd
| Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by zen-dog | [ Reply to This ]
  sweeeeeeeeet poem. the innermost struggle.

"There's only danger,
And then there's Death.
Both I fear not,
But being swallowed whole
Is the shadowing of my heart"

how do u tell it goodbye? well its only gonna go goodbye if u really want it to go.

but this want has to be strong enough to overpower ur other wants.

good luck

Aylin
| Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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