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Perfect


Author: darkwiccan14
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Words: 119
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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my perfect day, guy, place, world. I LOVE YOU C.S. you'll know who you are, and i hope you'll find this and read it. or mabe i'll just show it to u sometime. LOVE YOU!


Perfect



Awake in this beautiful day,
As you walk towards me,
I long for you to take me
Away.

As we both walk hand in hand,
Down this long twisted path,
We talk and talk about many random
Plans.

You turn to me as I to you,
And feel the touch of your hand,
As I runs through my hair,
And into your eyes that are so
Blue.

With a quick glance and whisper,
You have stole a quick kiss,
And everything seemed to stop,
And the air became more
Crisper.

All I can say to you is,
I Love you and always
Will,
Whether I'm feeling Anger
Or Blue.

I LOVE YOU.




Submitted on 2007-04-22 17:47:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i really like it. the ends of each stanza is good, how you make each word satnd out @ the ends.
| Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by VampireMaiden | [ Reply to This ]
  ah, this was a very sweet poem. i'm sure he'll be really touched by this...

as a thought, i think you meant "stolen", and you could probably drop "more" before "crisper" to tighten this up. but hey, just my opinion.

overall, nicely done.
zd
| Posted on 2007-04-23 00:00:00 | by zen-dog | [ Reply to This ]


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