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    dots Submission Name: Service With A Smile - Chapter 2dots
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    Author: caballero7137
    ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
    Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9/104/123
    Words: 380
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    dotsService With A Smile - Chapter 2dots
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    Service With A Smile Chapter 2
    With the sounds sirens nearing the clinic, some of the patients that had a view to the outside world began breathing a little sigh of relief but this brief reprieve was short live as the blaring sounds were coming from mobile news truck. Companies from the diverse news network had surrounded the building. Trucks from CBC,TVA, GLOBAL, CNN, Discovery Channel ,CTV, BBC ,CBS, FOX ,ABC,NBC,MSNBC, JapanToday , TLC and several independent news network could be observed parking themselves in the parking lot of this small local medical establishment. Meanwhile the lady on a rampage began breathing heavy like a bull as she eyed her next victim. Her eyes fixated on a man in the early 40th that laid on the floor as he was suffering from respiratory problem and had along his side two oxygen tanks attached to stretch out tubing. She slowly lunged toward the frightened fellow as she savoured the precious moments prior to killing another life. She disconnected the tubing from the oxygen tanks, which rocketed around the room till they entered the ventilation system. All we heard were the little denting sounds of metal meeting metal. While the tanks were swimming in the ventilation shaft, the tubing was slowly being wrapped tightly around the ill man. The tubing had been looped around the neck 28 times then she pulled with her two hands, which squeezed the windpipe and the neck area till I watched the head of the man pop right off. The head rolled like a bowling ball in search of a pin and the pin came in the shape of me. Even though I felt like howling, I withheld and redirected the head several meter back toward the lady. I hoped and prayed she hadnt spotted me up. Fortunately she was too focused on her latest ``prize`` that she aggressively picked it and went to the window where the crews were shooting and proudly displayed the carnage she had executed. She even bit into the left ear of the head. But an hour now has passed since this ordeal began and no sign of police. Even though I secretly placed the 911 call as soon as everything broke out. Where could they be?





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