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    dots Submission Name: Stand Talldots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsStand Talldots
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    Stand tall
    Be a soldier
    Don't runaway from a war
    that u can only fight

    "It's emotional game
    It's a mental game
    At war with yourslef"

    Thoughts of depression
    Thoughts of sucide
    Old thoughts
    You once said

    These thought are like herpes
    It never go away
    No kind of pill can cure me
    comes and goes as pleases...

    "It's emotional game
    It's a mental game
    At war with yourslef"

    You have to find the inner strength
    To fight for our to life.
    No more running
    It's time to stand tall
    It's time for you to face these demoms, that have been presented to you.

    Don't lie
    Don't cheat
    Don't Fear
    It a chess game in this Mental warfare
    Your thoughts are your pawns
    Your actions are your Queen
    You run from your thought
    The pawns are useless
    Leaving your Queen open for harm fullness


    "It's emotional game
    It's a mental game
    At war with yourslef"

    Stand tall
    Be a soldier
    Don't runaway from a war
    that u can only fight....................




    Submitted on 2007-04-22 19:09:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its nice when you are able to reach deep down into yourself and find a pathway for self expression poetry actually gives you an avenue to have your say and this piece actually expresses a lot for a lot of people actually do need to look at em eyes in the mirror and stand tall.
    | Posted on 2007-05-02 00:00:00 | by webdevil | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, it's a good aproach to this subject. There are a few typos and such that make it a little hard to read in places but hey I can't say much about that. I love your aproach on fighting depression like it's a war that you can't run from. I can really relate to this. Good piece. Keep on writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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