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Tonight I sleep under the moon windows here aren't built for the shy the birds all watch me as I fly and dead trees paint the skies I take you to dinner and no more am I so lonely lines of knobs you'll be one of them soon ghostly faces in the telephone booth scrawny corpses in the metal box lifts chasing mary all round my mind so many times have we been alone my beds too small for loving I chase my shadow in morning by night it's slipped away who knows that the thought slipped who else knows how easy it is to let your mouth slip and your tongue runs on a bit of thought you hadn't put too much thought into fell down on the field the pigeons pecked my eyes with rainbow beaks it took weeks for me to find you stoned gods holding up things that we couldn't put ourselves up to put graffitti on the walls naked indians on dope now I find I've got a new place to hate worked my way west just to circle back to east when it rains we dodge the giants sunspots in the house of the living sky stains in the window panes stoned faces with the eyes falling out chipping in the cool dry air I like your eyes more than I can seem to want to snakes circle through slithering mazes in apartment buildings weaving windows through the walls things always brighten up these days we just wait them out a shaman dancing on his last train of thoughts long gone all the goosebumps look like craters at night when the spotlight shines a dim sadness now the angels whisper tongues flicking from the horns in their minds i'll come home to see your pretty eyes soon right around christmas time I'll be home maybe you'll of moved on and I can get everything I've been waiting for don't get too friendly with those streets and those men train ride giant fields connecting tiny towns packed with people and their friends roads full of roadkill and working men you can take my money I don't have that much you can kill my wife but please dont' touch my lover don't deflower that girl I saved the best for last the tiny man will dance across the flower fields pollened faces spread their lips wide as the tiny man falls inside I am the sun tonight tonight we dine on grape vines the trees could not contain us tonight we kiss the sky black lights show semen stains we ride upon a shooting star you see the kids that we once were all our friends who have died eternal lifes spent as a child we always thought life was un-fair I guess we just thought too hard we're not all we're cracked up to be or maybe i'm just cracking under the light that shines when you've gone to sleep and I've gone to thinking of you |
It's a good start but I feel it needs much work It's confusing and hard to follow I would work on the structure and form Your choice and imagery is wonderful It just needs to be pulled together and a less all over the place sense | Posted on 2007-04-23 00:00:00 | by digitalflower | [ Reply to This ] | |