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A Tale Of A Chub

Author: Sanjhana
ASL Info:    21/f/India
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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the name was inspired by samuel johnson's tale of a tub... the rest is original

A Tale Of A Chub

chubby little baby
please dont cry
your dreams will come true
thats not a lie

be deaf to the taunts
dont hear those mocks
you will shine one day
and knock off their socks

chubby little baby
please dont cry
begged his mother
she had to try

chubby little baby
with very little faith
went out to the park
but he was full of hate

he played alone
day after day
he made up his mind
that someone would pay

chubby little baby
with very little faith
picked up a gun
and it was already too late

chubby little baby
oh my little baby chub
cried his mother
but the damage was already done

Submitted on 2007-04-23 08:49:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This hits home - here in the states - as we just had a lonely and anti-social gunmen wreak havoc on a university campus.

The mind and soul need love and nurturing and sometimes it can be very damaging to people's psyches with or without nurturing -

Your piece mirrors a lot of what is going on in the world today - sadly.

Good job!

love,peace,joy&smiles to share

| Posted on 2007-04-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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