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    dots Submission Name: Bulimicdots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 734
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1060

       Based off of "Until I'm bitter", by in shadow

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    Her signature is a disease,
    Even when she ceases to breathe,
    She gets weak in the knees,
    And even weeps in the sheets,
    Her soul is starving,
    But her heart is bulimic,
    If you listened when she screamed it,
    You wouldíve seen it,
    She binges and purges,
    In urges of seismic surges,
    Looks down verges,
    Six feet deep, but whatís worse is,
    Youíre never there,
    We know you never care,
    We write pieces on it all the time,
    Lighter airier words,
    On smaller rhymes,
    Itís about the little things,
    So all she sings,
    Is of the pain you bring,
    She gave you her last breath,
    And because of you,
    She wept,
    And I had to watch it all,
    As quiet as itís kept,
    I know itís not my place,
    I shouldnít take a step,
    But she walks a thin line and you,
    You just watched her wreck,
    Her soul was starving,
    Heart was bulimic,
    You hurt her,
    And I all too well seen it,

    Submitted on 2007-04-23 12:09:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem is amazing. i love it.
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the revisions you added since you sent that draft to me. i like the spin off. and thanks for the creds. i love the third person angle. you watched and i lived it. plus major kudos to the note that you kept with the lost love theme.

    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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