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    dots Submission Name: Same Old Daddots
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    Author: gothicgirl
    ASL Info:    23/f/recreant world
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 127/111/48
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 982
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 952



    Description:
       its about my dad and his short cummings (not just his dick ither)


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    dotsSame Old Daddots
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    When you look at me you see moms face
    while Iím looking at you in your disgrace.
    You yell, you scream
    Iím running away, youíre yelling to leave
    Then you turn around to deceive.
    Iím crying, itís dark, Iím alone
    I hope you cry as you sit at home.

    Iím tired of trying thereís never an end
    and you wonder why Iím always gone with my friends?
    I want to get out, but right now Iím trapped
    while both you and grandma tell me youíre tired of all my crap?
    Well Iím sick of the both of you
    and all of the shit you think you do
    because I do a lot more then you think
    youíre just one more reason I need a shrink
    why I cut, and do dangerous shit
    but blaming it on bi-polar just seems to fit.
    just give me youíre lithium, then my problems are gone,
    and weíll go on with life singing the same boring song.




    Submitted on 2007-04-23 13:21:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There's alot of emotion in this poem and it really carried the reader with it. I enjoyed it and look forward to reading more.

    Warmgun
    | Posted on 2011-07-25 00:00:00 | by WarmGun | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. It reminds me of when I was younger.. Everyone seemed to think I needed a shrink when in reality I just needed to get away from my abusive dad. I would here his same old [censored] and tell my mom the same old lies.. Good wright
    | Posted on 2007-05-11 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      go back and check the word you're...next to lithium. it's your. typo! but i really like the poem it was really good!
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by Frivilous _ | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...i can really relate...my dad left me when i was eight years old...and he chose drugs and alcohol over me...and my mom...yea she thinks i do alot of [censored]....but she has no idea how much...and my mom wonders why im never at home and always wiht my friends...she told me its becuase she thinks i have a problem wiht drugs and cant make good choices...she never stops to think that maybe she is the reason...but anyways enough about me...this is a good peom...you are good a writing...keep it up.

    ~crazy~
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by crazyinsane | [ Reply to This ]


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