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    dots Submission Name: A PART OF Medots
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    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4/33/54
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       A poem written to me by my ex girlfriend


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    dotsA PART OF Medots
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    The phone rang twice before u picked up. Ur voice gave me instant peace because my subconscious knew u were the one. Some undescribable force drew me closer to u, so close that u became a part of me. A part that has reshaped my whole heart just big enough for u to fit inside. I know i tell u i love u but it doesn't seem like enough on this special day. I want to tell u how i love u and how u make all pain go away. I love u with this passion that fills my chest pushing against my lungs making it hard to breathe. Ur kisses are the gasps of air that briefly alleviate my suffering. Ur eyes like faucets are my comfort, leaking truth that u have said. Ur hands are my strength, lifting me to a place only journeyed in dreams. Ur mind is my wisdom, that captivates every thought of u and ur soul is my mate that will forever be my companion. Sadly i mourn in silence for there is a part missing. Like a half cried tear i am incomplete. U are that part that is missing...u are my heart beat.




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