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    dots Submission Name: Stained With Memorydots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 528
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 729



    Description:
       Sounds like some emo bullshit.

    In honor of the two year anniversary of me getting my ass dumped!


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsStained With Memorydots
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    The tears have created spots
    That never will come out
    And the pain tends to cause marks
    That no-one can know about
    The scars aren't visible
    But they affect everything I do
    The only time I ever smiled
    Was when I was with you
    The holes can never be filled
    I'm completely empty inside
    Your absence sucks at my veins
    And a part of me has died
    Despite it all, I keep on going
    Treading heavily on shards of glass
    Bleeding from my soul
    Trying to put you in the past
    I'm finally ending this chapter
    In the story of you and me
    The tears have stopped falling, but I
    Am stained with memory.




    Submitted on 2007-04-23 19:48:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thanks for the comment and faves add. this piece is already similar tot he one i have writtin. its hard to get through love and life sometimes. but be real to yourself and your feelings and you will get better. do wahat you want and not what you guilt yourself into.




    tina
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very lovely peice you have here...its a bit emo, but not "dear god, go one antidepressants already" if you know what i mean....

    the flow, like jaz said is great and smooth...
    you did a great job! i really loved that while some form of rhyme was consistent, that you mixed slant with straight on rhyming....

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-05-04 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      "The tears have created spots
    That never will come out
    And the pain tends to cause marks
    That no-one can know about
    The scars aren't visible"

    I like this part the mostes. I think this is a good poem, the rhymes are BADDASS and it all seems to flow great. I don't know what else to say. But I likes the poem even though it was a nostalgia Tony scarred thing. It was well written.
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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