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An Empty Playground

Author: Reckoner
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I am surrounded by tasteless luxury, a flavor that cannot be registered by the heart.

An Empty Playground

Circled the dirt with his loose fit shoe
bathed in the light of his woman's teachings
eyes facing the worn lining of his girlfriend's shoe
a short visceral laugh
swallowed up by her ears alone
to reassure him that her ears do more than listen
they liken more to the fluidity of nocturnal tongues
then that of raucous comments aimed at foolish children

children who
hold our lids closed when we wish to breath
clinch our fists when we wish to taste things in our own way
shake our bodies free of loose change
when we haven't got some kind of monitary words to exchange

children with new caricatures to breeze upon
new features to breed upon
life is a shortcut to spit upon
so they dance all over the board
and you and me
stamp their feet on all the imagery
then start all over somewhere else

circled the dirt where I stood close to you
seeing it even at times when the children stand around
how the light trickled off of your chin in my memory
while I stare at those browning glances
all my awful surroundings
they never conjured up a thought as broad as you
as surreal as your ghost looks on their blank faces

It will be over when your holding my hair
above the pushing and pulling
when your fingers are showering over me
pummeling and prying apart the paths of the perverse
seperating the playground from those who do not believe in feeling

Submitted on 2007-04-23 19:57:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i keep forgetting you post them on here.
i know i's sad... that we've left this place. and it's even sadder that you didnt tell me you posted this on here...uhm....agrr!

anywho, i've already told you this is ama-za-zing so i'll just go fav it then move onto the next one. so i luuuuuuh you...and and and yeah... :)

| Posted on 2007-05-06 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]

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