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    dots Submission Name: Your Faded Blue Jeansdots
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    Author: bubble_popper15
    ASL Info:    17, f, confused
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 201/127/45
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    dotsYour Faded Blue Jeansdots
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    Your faded blue jeans
    The ones with the hole ripped in the seam
    To me, you don't know how much it means
    When you wear your faded blue jeans
    The jeans you wore when we first met
    That's a day I'll never forget
    You saw me walking along the pier
    And asked me what was my biggest fear
    I said falling into Lake Bummer
    You said your biggest fear was not getting my number
    A few weeks later I let you take me to the beach
    The tide took me in and for your hand I had to reach
    I reached for your hand, but grabbed your jeans
    And tore a hole right in the seam
    Now when you wear those special jeans I think of that day
    The day when the tide led me astray
    But, to my luck, your jeans saved me in that weird way
    I'm glad you have those jeans
    The ones that are sky blue
    Because if it weren't for the hole in the seam
    I wouldn't be right here with you




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      This poem was so so clever! Everything seemed to fit and have a special meaning. This is def. a fav. of mine. Yet another poem of yours that made me smile = ]
    | Posted on 2008-09-02 00:00:00 | by CaughtRedhanded | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww how cute!! Its so sweet. And I know your sitting righ there by me but I will write what I want to say! Well this reminds me of the time I met the first person I have ever liked, I was only 4! It was like puppie love otr somethign it was so sweet!! Love ya lovely!!
    | Posted on 2007-04-26 00:00:00 | by Carter | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely piece,you managed to pull of the rhythmic style without it sounding forced or basic so good job...everything flows as it should.Its a nice little story and I like how you've gotten a poem out of an item of clothing,explaining how we can associate certain emotions,love etc with objects from the past.I have an after shave for instance that reminds my of when I was younger cos I used to wear it all the time back then,bad example:-)but I liked this poem,shows considerable skill as a writer...

    -Craig
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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