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The feelings in my heart never left and I long for the man of my dreams
The breeze brings a hint of spring
It blows strands of hair across my face
I wish you were here to brush them away
The sun shines brightly from the sky above
The rays warm my cheeks and my lips
I wish you were here to share them with
The blanket is wrapped around me
The stars overhead gleam with light
I wish you were here holding me so I could see the light in your eyes
The tear drops run down freely
The memories hurt my broken heart
I wish you were here so the worst would be gone
The shadows bring me a wisper
It sounds so perfectly sweet
I wish you were here so I would know what forever could mean
Submitted on 2007-04-24 00:02:58
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I really love this poem i think that in such a short poem you captured what you intended to so well keep it up.
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This was short, but was written very well. I liked the broken heart, lost love feel you put into the poem. It really touched me. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.
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