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    dots Submission Name: I wish...dots
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    Author: Lover girl
    ASL Info:    17, female
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83/54/24
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       The feelings in my heart never left and I long for the man of my dreams


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    dotsI wish...dots
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    The breeze brings a hint of spring
    It blows strands of hair across my face
    I wish you were here to brush them away

    The sun shines brightly from the sky above
    The rays warm my cheeks and my lips
    I wish you were here to share them with

    The blanket is wrapped around me
    The stars overhead gleam with light
    I wish you were here holding me so I could see the light in your eyes

    The tear drops run down freely
    The memories hurt my broken heart
    I wish you were here so the worst would be gone

    The shadows bring me a wisper
    It sounds so perfectly sweet
    I wish you were here so I would know what forever could mean




    Submitted on 2007-04-24 00:02:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really love this poem i think that in such a short poem you captured what you intended to so well keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by blacktearz | [ Reply to This ]
      This was short, but was written very well. I liked the broken heart, lost love feel you put into the poem. It really touched me. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

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    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]


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