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I wish...


Author: Lover girl
ASL Info:    17, female
Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 83 /54 /24
Words: 128
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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The feelings in my heart never left and I long for the man of my dreams


I wish...



The breeze brings a hint of spring
It blows strands of hair across my face
I wish you were here to brush them away

The sun shines brightly from the sky above
The rays warm my cheeks and my lips
I wish you were here to share them with

The blanket is wrapped around me
The stars overhead gleam with light
I wish you were here holding me so I could see the light in your eyes

The tear drops run down freely
The memories hurt my broken heart
I wish you were here so the worst would be gone

The shadows bring me a wisper
It sounds so perfectly sweet
I wish you were here so I would know what forever could mean




Submitted on 2007-04-24 00:02:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really love this poem i think that in such a short poem you captured what you intended to so well keep it up.
| Posted on 2007-05-08 00:00:00 | by blacktearz | [ Reply to This ]
  This was short, but was written very well. I liked the broken heart, lost love feel you put into the poem. It really touched me. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

Saint Raxor
| Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]


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