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    dots Submission Name: A Solider's Poemdots
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    Author: bloody_raven
    ASL Info:    15-Female-NoWhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 11/30/22
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
    Total Views: 252
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsA Solider's Poemdots
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    'Twas the night before christmas , they lived all alone,
    in a one bedroom house made of plaster and stone.
    I had come down the chimney with presents to give,
    and to see just who in this house did live.
    I looked all about a strange sight I did see,
    no tinsel no presents not even a tree.
    no stockings by mantel just boots filled with sand;
    on the wall hung pictures of far distance lands.
    with medals and badges awards of all kinds,
    a sober thought came through my mind.
    for this house was different, it was dark and dreary,
    I found the home of a solder once I could see clearly. *
    the solder lay sleeping, silent, alone,
    curled up on the floor in this on bedroom home.
    the face was not gentle, the in such disorder,
    not how i pictured a united states solder.
    was this the hero of whom I just read?
    curled on a poncho, the floor a bed?
    I realized the families that I saw this night,
    owed their lives to these soldiers who were willing to fight.




    Submitted on 2007-04-24 09:49:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh wow, this was a really good write, i like how you used the 'Twas the night before christmas' theme. There were was couple spots that messed up the flow a bit, but other than that, i was really good

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    | Posted on 2008-06-14 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
      This feels very familiar.
    What does the asterick denote?

    simple ryhme scheme all flows, save a few odd worded spots
    what are you aiming at getting across?
    the sacrifice or the duty?

    | Posted on 2007-04-25 00:00:00 | by Yariel Alvarado | [ Reply to This ]



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