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    dots Submission Name: I know I lieddots
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    Author: soaring eyes
    ASL Info:    17/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18/30/19
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsI know I lieddots
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    The truth has to show one way or another.
    I have hidden lies from everyone
    my friends, my brothers, but this time it's from my lover
    I'm sorry forgive me
    my tongue I have not yet bitten
    for this is the truth to all of my lies
    here the truth is written.
    I didn't do what I said
    and yes I'm carrying a lie
    I don't want to sit down and think of them
    for then I may cry
    I made you believe me and trust that everything is okay
    but the lies of tomorrow will be made from the lies of today
    you may not get where I coming from
    you may not understand
    but the child I am carrying
    is not from you it is of another man
    I feel so ashame
    My name, to, I've brought disgrace
    I can tell that i've hurt you from the look upon your face.
    Forgiving me will be hard
    I know
    but for the next seven months
    my body will show.
    I'm sorry.




    Submitted on 2007-04-24 10:23:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Once again, a very endearing and emotional write from you.

    Very well written indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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