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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 795
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       it is a song but i need a name for it.


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    dotsuntitleddots
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    have you ever seen the pain inside
    have you even tried to say good bye
    did you ever think that i would say
    that i hate you more everyday

    you made me what i am today
    you gave me a reason to go away,
    with no light inside of me
    with old joys in my heart
    i ran away from you in the start

    can you hear me
    can you feel what i feel
    can you see whats iside of me
    do you realise that im NOT THERE ANYMORE

    uncomplecated, thats what i was toght to be
    with you it was different
    you gave me the chance to dream
    to heal
    to make myself real.

    can you hear me
    can you feel what i feel
    can you see whats iside of me
    do you realise that im NOT THERE ANYMORE

    i gave you the chance you needed to look inside

    i gave you your dreams back,
    now it's your turn to CRY

    you gave me the reason to die INSIDE

    can you hear me
    can you feel what i feel
    can you see..................whats inside
    have you yet realised that i'm ........GONE........




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      I hope you're not trying to tell me anything, lol. Nah, only kidding. If this is about what I think it is you really need to get over this, man. Forget about it and ignore those twats! Anyway it's a good poem but it's a little repetetive, but apart from that its cool.
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww this is very sad i get the message inside it, it makes me wanna cry great job keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by Druecilla | [ Reply to This ]


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