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    dots Submission Name: Sideways downdots

    Author: Anticlownperson
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere land
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 248/390/118
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Just an odd little babble that sounded shiny, so I thought I'd post it.

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    dotsSideways downdots

    How do you move forward
    when you're not sure which way's up?
    loss of gravity; vertigo
    port is starboard, fore becomes aft
    keel and crow's nest have no meaning
    the helm is empty
    and the sails blow against the wind
    sailing forward
    but ever moving backward
    time traveling through uncertainty
    space-ship, sea-ship
    doesn't matter to me
    both hold their freight as long as they can
    until sea and space upend them
    and then it's twirling, sinking
    never moving, stuck in the
    suffocating darkness
    blackness below
    and blackness above
    how do you move forward
    when you can't tell which way's up?

    Submitted on 2007-04-24 12:02:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This sounds like the bane of many a 15 year old and I can personally tell you that your bearings will come over time and the collection of life experiences. That's not to say that all answers will become chrystal clear to you but the path will not be quite a askew as it seems right now. Chin up and fingers on the keyboard...keep writing your feelings.
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      I think we've all had these unsorted and backwards days - sometimes the world just seems to be chaos in motion. I enjoyed this piece and I loved the title!


    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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