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    dots Submission Name: Dawn of daylightdots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 689
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    Description:
       This must be the first semi-happy poem I have ever wrote =s


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    dotsDawn of daylightdots
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    In this heavenly fortress
    We are not lost.
    We live in everlasting happiness,
    That none of our sadness can erase!
    You must not fear anymore,
    You will not be alone.
    You can live here forever
    Right here in my arms.
    There used to be no happy ending.
    All there were was sadness and pain.
    No escape from depression.
    But here we are, and its all began.
    We have escaped the clutches of sorrow.
    And started a new beginning.
    Just me, you and the children of our future.
    We're happier than the sun is to see us.
    We have grown a future with a new beginning.
    A beginning with so much joy and love.
    Or is it just the beginning of the end,
    Anything can happen now,
    We're just not sure yet.




    Submitted on 2007-04-24 13:52:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      man thats deep!
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by Steve-O | [ Reply to This ]


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