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    dots Submission Name: ... Ready for this...dots
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    Author: babygirl09
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 69/63/49
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 789
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    Description:
       this is just kinda a rambling... It came to mind and I'm goin away from writing about guys and stupid high school drama for a while...


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    Am I ready for this
    A new start of a new day
    no more pain
    Or stupid guys
    long crazy nights
    throwin myself
    into careless fights

    Am I ready for this
    A change I can control
    It's not only my hair and clothes
    But my actions and attitude as well

    Am I ready for this
    A new set of friends
    Not at a new school
    Just my peers around me

    Am I ready for this
    Sayin good-bye to my exs
    Not caring about the rumors
    or the long nights that I miss

    Am I ready for this?
    I think I am

    So I'll give it a try

    And see if it fits




    Submitted on 2007-04-24 14:49:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *applause* good for you! I totally understand your attitude!

    Though this stanza:

    Am I ready for this
    Sayin good-bye to my exs
    Not caring about the rumors
    or the long nights that I miss

    sounds less fluent than the rest of the poem, maybe it's the "exs" part of it. That line kind of breaks the overall rythm of the poem.
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by Keller | [ Reply to This ]


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