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    dots Submission Name: It was only a dealdots
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    Author: babygirl09
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 69/63/49
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 746
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1720



    Description:
       this is what happened to one of my friends when she was raped. She still hasn't gotten her security back. but after something like that. no one ever does.


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    She didn't know his name
    Or where he was from
    He knew everything about her
    Even her dead dad's name
    He invited her to a party
    She willingly agreed
    Thinking it would be fun
    Not knowing what was coming
    She had too much to drink
    Cause he spiked her soda
    She felt like
    She was goin in a coma
    He took her upstairs
    To help her get cleaned up
    Then laid her on the bed
    So she'd feel a little better
    Before she knew what was going on
    He was on top of her
    Ripping clothes off
    Throwing them carelessly on the floor
    She begged him to stop
    Cause she was too weak to fight
    The pill had kicked in
    So she had to lay still
    He slowly raped her
    As if they were making love
    He came deep inside her
    Then slowly got up
    With tears in her eyes
    She pulled the blanket over her body
    But it's no use
    Her sense of security is ruined
    She looks in his cold eyes
    And for a second time stops
    Then she slowly whispers
    "Why'd you do that?"
    He looks at her for a second
    Then laughs in her face
    Puts his pants on and says
    "It's only a game."
    Fury flashes in her eyes
    As she screams
    "That was my virginity! I want it back! It wasn't a game to me. So why did you do it?!"
    He opens the door and says
    "It was for fifty dollars."

    He leaves her alone
    Even after he's gone
    She can't do anything
    Since her security's demolished




    Submitted on 2007-04-24 14:59:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was a really good one. it was really sad thought. i almost cryed!
    ~~~KAYLEE~~~
    | Posted on 2007-04-24 00:00:00 | by KayLee Renee | [ Reply to This ]


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